Cargo Net.

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Never in my life had I faced such a difficult challenge. I stood in front of the cargo net I felt hot.. I would never be ready for this.

It was Physical Education and there was lots of equipment around. The net was something we all had to do and I needed to at least try to climb it. I was not a good climber, and never had been. I wanted to turn away. But I grabbed the net in my hands  and began to climb. I said words to encourage myself as I went. I was worried that I might get a rope burn or splinters.  I tried not to think about feeling scared of heights. I went more slowly the longer I climbed.

I stopped altogether. I felt weak and there was still so far to climb.

I called to the teacher that I was finished. I lowered myself down. I was thinking that I had tried my best. I still most likely cannot climb the  cargo net. But I was pleased I had tried.

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I had never faced a difficult challenge in my life. I stood in front of the cargo net blistering with sweat. I was petrified “I would never be ready for this adventure” I muttered to myself.

It was Physical Education and there was a quantity of equipment. Net was an activity that we all had to do, at least to try and escalate up it. I wanted to turn away. I clutched my hand on the net, and began to mount. “I can do it” I said to myself as I went. I looked at my hands, worried. I’m going to get rope burn, and Splinters! I considered not to think about heights.

Longer I climbed, the more slowly I went. I clutched my feet on the net. I was exhausted, I looked up there was still far to climb. I looked down, seeing all my classmates cheering me on. But there was no way I was going to finish this course.

No sense of achievement I called to the teacher. “I’m Finished Sir”. I was lowered down. I tried my best but the cargo net taunted me.